9.3 Stamping Our New Foot on Line 2

But what of line 2? .   ,    .  .  ,   .     .  ,     .    . , . And what do we see here? Surround with illusion? Hmm. Well, that works, technically, but I don’t like the word “illusion” going further into the fourth foot than its first syllable. Perhaps instead we should say: .   ,    .  .  ,   .     .  ,   .   .  , And what do we see here? Surrounded by lies? This would create an interesting link with the word “lies” in the first line, especially since the two words, Read more about 9.3 Stamping Our New Foot on Line 2[…]

7.4 Duplicating the Rhythm in Line 3

Now for line 3: “We either must reduce ourselves to the particles that compose us.” The phrase “particles that” fits the section of the rhythm where “reality lies” and “see with our eyes” are in lines 1 and 2. But to get it in the right place, we’d need to shorten the first part of Read more about 7.4 Duplicating the Rhythm in Line 3[…]

7.3 Duplicating the Rhythm in Line 2

Now we need to figure out if we can make the other four lines fit the same rhythm. At the moment, line 2 says, “And what we see at our level is an illusion.” That is too short. We need 15 syllables, and it only has 13. Furthermore, its first word is “and” which would Read more about 7.3 Duplicating the Rhythm in Line 2[…]

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